the terrible surprise

Yesterday I was walking down the street and I saw a really dark path with an amazing shining red box. I walked down the street like it was made for me. I opened it and it was empty. What  a surprise! wait. what? its nothing. I heard a  ting ting so I followed it and at the end of the trail it led me to the sand. It was the greatest object in the world so  I lifted it up and then it wouldn’t leave me alone.  every were I went every second from night to day I figerd out it was the worst

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  1. Ellie,
    Your piece was very imaginative. It was quite a twist to discover that things are not always what they seem. I found your use of antonyms interesting: dark street, but shiny box. I also liked your use of sound effects.
    Keep writing.
    Mrs. G., Team 100, Guilderland, NY, USA

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